[font=Comic Sans MS]I'm the first to make a thread in the poetry section so here it goes. This poem I made around a month ago that I dedicatd to my girl vicky.


Like the flow to a river it never seems to stop,
when I hear your soothing voice, my heart just simply drops
Like the air to my lungs, without you I'll suffocate and die
so lets spread our love as the time passes by.
You brought happiness in my life when no one else could,
you treat me the right way, like a real woman should.
And when times seem tough lets do our very best,
and show all our haters that we're not like the rest.
Love has it's challenges, and love has it's tests,
so lets hold our heads up high and reach our loves crest.
Unimaginable feelings when we talk on the phone,
dreams do come true, for you have given and i have shown.
So do me just one favor, and never drift away,
you're the answer to my prayers that i wished for every day
The fact that you're all mine brings joy inside my soul,
laughter to myself because your heart I truly stole.
Not a giggle of dementedness but a laugh of sweet relief,
you made me love again, you brought back my belief.
You stole my heart within a beat, when it was really fractured
you got the skills, and talents because my love you went and captured.

Good or bad feedback appreciated. [/font]

Not bad at all. definitely sounds like a vato in love with his girl

I used to write so much ... but kind of lost my touch since the passing of my inspiration.


Viva el amor!

GOOD POEM

[font=Comic Sans MS] Aww, thanks everyone. I appreciate the feedback<3 [/font]

esta chido homie....tal vez llore adentro profudamente

Im loving this poem, as Im reading it Its like i can actually feel what you are feeling with the use of words...A beautiful poem mijo...

chicano wrote:[font=Comic Sans MS]I'm the first to make a thread in the poetry section so here it goes. This poem I made around a month ago that I dedicatd to my girl vicky.


Like the flow to a river it never seems to stop,
when I hear your soothing voice, my heart just simply drops
Like the air to my lungs, without you I'll suffocate and die
so lets spread our love as the time passes by.
You brought happiness in my life when no one else could,
you treat me the right way, like a real woman should.
And when times seem tough lets do our very best,
and show all our haters that we're not like the rest.
Love has it's challenges, and love has it's tests,
so lets hold our heads up high and reach our loves crest.
Unimaginable feelings when we talk on the phone,
dreams do come true, for you have given and i have shown.
So do me just one favor, and never drift away,
you're the answer to my prayers that i wished for every day
The fact that you're all mine brings joy inside my soul,
laughter to myself because your heart I truly stole.
Not a giggle of dementedness but a laugh of sweet relief,
you made me love again, you brought back my belief.
You stole my heart within a beat, when it was really fractured
you got the skills, and talents because my love you went and captured.

Good or bad feedback appreciated. [/font]

SOMEBODY'S WHOOPED J/F . . BUENAS LETRAS AND "CAN I BORROW IT"?

^^^^You Aint got No Game Gonzo

nope, but i'm willing to try anything even if it ain't mine

Your that desperate vato?