...sunset

niyorco · by **niyorco** on Thu, May 01 2008, 11:25 PM

Still I hear the wind whisper
when you are near
and I feel
your breath beneath my tear.

No worries or flaws
no pain in this fall
the life I knew is now gone
and you are near in night and dawn.

Yet I can hear the wind whisper
all of your breath
and whatevers left
I'll miss your steps
and await the day

.......... when theirs nothing left.

A start of a new journey
to an end of living death.

as the wind whispers
and I feel your breath,,,,,

I'll hold whats left
as I await
....................my last sunset.

reedadeet · by **reedadeet** on Thu, May 01 2008, 11:26 PM

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ii LiiK3 THAT iiTZ H3LLA FiiRM3

niyorco · by **niyorco** on Thu, May 01 2008, 11:33 PM

thank you

ur1nonly · by **ur1nonly** on Fri, May 02 2008, 12:05 AM

nice, really nice :Clap:

niyorco · by **niyorco** on Fri, May 02 2008, 1:03 PM

thanks!

3lmo · by **3lmo** on Fri, May 02 2008, 1:28 PM

this reminds me of a poem I read called "The Wind"
I really like your poem, cuz it reminds me ^^^^^^

Pika_Guerita · by **Pika_Guerita** on Fri, May 02 2008, 2:52 PM

wow, thats really nice...I like it... :Clap:

niyorco · by **niyorco** on Sat, May 03 2008, 10:29 PM

gracias a todos.

EL_GENERAL_REV. · by **EL_GENERAL_REV.** on Thu, May 29 2008, 10:16 AM

Exellent poem but I got kind of lost at the meaning of this poem is it kind of lost in your exellent rhymes and i like the beat when I read it out loud nice strong poem that uses easy words to do so which to me is my favorite part

bello poema bello :rosa: :rosa: :rosa:

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niyorco · by **niyorco** on Thu, May 29 2008, 6:28 PM

Thanks! Good to hear you enjoyed it.

...sunset

...sunset

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