My Walk Mi Andar

IM ALWAYS TAKING THAT WALK
SO LONELY DARK N RAINY
WITH ONLY MY THOUGHTS AND NO TALK
THE DARK CLOUDS SEEM TO FOLLOW
LA CAMINADA CONTINUA
DE ATRAS VIENE UN SENTIMIENTO FALSO
LA FELICIDAD ME PERSIGUE
PERO EL PASADO CAMINA A MI LADO
Y ME RECUERDO DE TODO LO QUE HICE
I REGRET TAKING THE WRONG ROAD
ONE QUESTION ROAMS,"WILL IT END?"
BUT I WANT TO SEE WHATS TO UNFOLD

not all poems are long

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Good Job 3LMO!

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Orale, that camino sounds familiar.

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	iPete dijo:
	Orale, that camino sounds familiar.

what road is that?

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Elmo, if you've read any of my feedback on the bp poetry boards, you should know I'm know as a very infamous critic so I'ma give you nothing but honesty.

It was short, but the words you used went along well with the poem. The whole english going into spanish and going into english once again wasn't a good idea, it could of been a lot better if it went from english and stayed in spanish.

Other than that, the poem was good.

Keep at it.

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i'll be bugging you if your not with me.. cuz you know what?
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Right..

chicano dijo:

Elmo, if you've read any of my feedback on the bp poetry boards, you should know I'm know as a very infamous critic so I'ma give you nothing but honesty. It was short, but the words you used went along well with the poem. The whole english going into spanish and going into english once again wasn't a good idea, it could of been a lot better if it went from english and stayed in spanish. Other than that, the poem was good. Keep at it.

hey vato ima be honest to, ummmmm. I wrote this poem in like 5 minutes so,thats why it was short, I just wrote my thoughts rite quick you know....

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miralo, te avientas elmo, its really nice

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la mano para el amigo
caricias para las hombres
balas pa' los enemigos

thanks Diana^^^^^

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you think so....thanx ey

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