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Beezelbub
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View Single Post Posted: Wed, May 28 2008, 9:52 PM Post subject:

:rolleyes: Nevermind Ana Current Mood:

W1ck3d_S0ul
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View Single Post Posted: Wed, May 28 2008, 9:56 PM Post subject:

na tell me who you is cuz im lost, ma name is nowhere posted anywhere is it? oh lmao lmao on ma poem duh lmao lmao wow blonde momment lol, for a second i thought you was a hommie i know lol lmao lmao wow thas funny but um lmao lmao lmao lmao im so dumb serio lol had me trippin lmao lmao lmao pero um thanx for tellin me how to spell elucion preciate it Current Mood: _________________ .: N0Th!n !n Th!s W0rLd !s Fr33, 3v3rYtH!ng HaS !t'S Pr!c3, 3v3n Y0u N M3 ((0uR L!v3s)) :. .: Sh0uLdA' N3vA' UnDa'EsT!mAt3d HaTr3d Bu!lD!n; Got M3 S0 MaD ! WaNnA' TaK3 0uT Y0uR Ch!lDr3n ~ Mr. L!l-0n3 :. .: ((S0mBrA !s Th3 NaM3 !nSaN3 !s WhAt ! ClA!m)) :. .: Sm!l3 N0w CrY LaT3r, FuCk !t WhY CrY At AlL :.

Beezelbub
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View Single Post Posted: Wed, May 28 2008, 10:02 PM Post subject:

No problem homegirl...:] Current Mood:

W1ck3d_S0ul
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View Single Post Posted: Wed, May 28 2008, 10:06 PM Post subject:

yea lol Current Mood: _________________ .: N0Th!n !n Th!s W0rLd !s Fr33, 3v3rYtH!ng HaS !t'S Pr!c3, 3v3n Y0u N M3 ((0uR L!v3s)) :. .: Sh0uLdA' N3vA' UnDa'EsT!mAt3d HaTr3d Bu!lD!n; Got M3 S0 MaD ! WaNnA' TaK3 0uT Y0uR Ch!lDr3n ~ Mr. L!l-0n3 :. .: ((S0mBrA !s Th3 NaM3 !nSaN3 !s WhAt ! ClA!m)) :. .: Sm!l3 N0w CrY LaT3r, FuCk !t WhY CrY At AlL :.

EL_GENERAL_REV.
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View Single Post Posted: Thu, May 29 2008, 11:00 AM Post subject:

This is good poem but in my opinion it needs more metaphors the poem is clealy about you liking a guy so why not use some methaphors allagory's literaly technices to kind of hide it between the lines make the reader think a little have fun with words! compare him to things that remind him you. I mean if you are going to show him you poem. Current Mood:

W1ck3d_S0ul
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View Single Post Posted: Thu, May 29 2008, 9:06 PM Post subject:

^^^ thanx for your response, preciate it! and sabes your right, i should but when i write ma poems, i jus write da words that i feel, da words dat come out, but i'll try to put more metaphores into ma poems thanx Current Mood: _________________ .: N0Th!n !n Th!s W0rLd !s Fr33, 3v3rYtH!ng HaS !t'S Pr!c3, 3v3n Y0u N M3 ((0uR L!v3s)) :. .: Sh0uLdA' N3vA' UnDa'EsT!mAt3d HaTr3d Bu!lD!n; Got M3 S0 MaD ! WaNnA' TaK3 0uT Y0uR Ch!lDr3n ~ Mr. L!l-0n3 :. .: ((S0mBrA !s Th3 NaM3 !nSaN3 !s WhAt ! ClA!m)) :. .: Sm!l3 N0w CrY LaT3r, FuCk !t WhY CrY At AlL :.

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